Monday, January 21, 2008

431. Olamic Peace



Kyra ejected her cord from the dataport on the second suspension capsule with sober prejudice. Teal data flickered before her weary eye, reflecting the world entire on the inside of her curved faceplate, and then, as if in mimic, faded from view of eye if not of mind: One enclosure held Zoe, the other Ceru; one living, one olamic. Kyra turned. She could have cried. She wanted to be elsewhere, anywhere but in this private moment. Managing a solemn ecclesiastical whisper, as if the spoken word, by tone, could heal or harm, she called, "Von."

Excerpt from an interview with Kyra on earth: I felt like I was looking at the past, as if I was in a sacred cathedral lit by votive candles, a place majestic and ancient, a place I didn't belong. I wanted to change places with Von. I wanted him to see his son first, not second. I wanted him to be close, not me. To see a father viewing his son, the father alive, the son not, to know there is nothing to say, to feel that rarefied air, a mystical place, surreal, out-of-body, a place beyond language is like standing on the edge of a sunset, your feet ablaze with a white heat, your eyes drowning in the depths of the deepest ocean, your shoulders and arms as stone of ancient statues. Such was a moment I would neither trade for all the universe nor wish to ever experience again.

Von raised his hand as if to reach for what he knew would not reach back, as if the tension in the air itself could be grasped, could be held as a rope in the lightness of moments dreamed but not imagined. Kyra, standing sideways, opened her arm, her face without smile or frown, a mask to match a time where seconds were minutes and minutes were hours. Von approached, looked at Kyra. She nodded. Placing his hands on the cold clear glass, his eyes as crystals, Von leaned over, removed his helmet, and with words not heard, kissed the glass and closed his eyes. Kyra stepped aside and commed Bravo.

43 comments:

Trée said...

Side note: First time an interview excerpt has been interjecting into the middle of a chapter. Not sure I like this technique, although it seems to work in this case, which adheres to my rule of having no rules for this story. :-D

Keshi said...

Tre I saw they listed ur blog on BLOGS OF NOTE. WOW Congratts!

Keshi.

Trée said...

Thanks Keshi. I am humbly honored and grateful. Hope and trust you are well. Take care my friend.

BVM said...

That's beautiful

Kate Evangelista said...

The interview insert works in this case because it gives good background for the story. Almost like a flashback sequence.

Kate

Autumn Storm said...

It works extremely well, reminiscent of the recent stage direction given, but more than that it solidifies the impression of minutes turned to hours with a pause, time stopped in the past to be meditated upon in the future. That it is Kyra doing so, and not Von, burdens the heart even more, the moment for father too sacred, too personal for there to have been words from him thereof even many years later.

Likewise who can know exactly the extent of thoughts and emotions to pass through Von at the sight of his son, though he had anticipated this final outcome, his hand reaching for what could not reach back as Kyra looks on is a powerful image, beautifully done, and as he kisses the glass the image of him embracing the words 'I love you Dad' flitters in the background making the scene almost unbearably poignant.

Perhaps it is something I imagine, or it was written in the recent chapter, but to look upon them is to see them floating within their enclosures, one life extinguished, one housing two heartbeats, the end of life and the beginning side by side, father looking upon son, a woman with child, all of life and time, all of life and death, more meaningful still with the hint, and again the parallels are rife as the two outside look upon the two inside, past meeting present meeting future and all paused within this one moment, one seeing, one not, one never to.

Kyra's sombre description, a sacred cathedral lit by votive candles, a place majestic and ancient, a place I didn't belong couple with Von's silence, we do not even hear the words spoken, as it should be, to use her word makes the scene sacred, to repeat the technique as it is used here, bless the no rules rule, is pure brilliance. A great piece of writing, touching, heartfelt, brilliant.

Garg Unzola said...

Congrats on blogs of note!
Seems worth reading this story.

Miladysa said...

My favourite line? :

"Managing a solemn ecclesiastical whisper, as if the spoken word, by tone, could heal or harm, she called, "Von."

Hmm... well ... you have left me wondering... is he really dead? Does von have a grandchild?

Anonymous said...

Wow! I've always wanted to have a blog like this where I could tell a story. And you've done just that. What can I say...I love this! :D As soon as I'm done with school this week, I'll come back and read the WHOLE story from the start. :D

Daniel T said...

That image is absolutely breathtaking. It's much like a close eyed hallucination yet even more vivid. Amazing.

Trée said...

Danny, thanks for the kind words. Creating these images can be addicting. :-)

Trée said...

lil' brat, the first post in the story is 26 Nov 2005. Enjoy. :-)

Trée said...

Miladysa, not to spoil what is on the horizon but I'll answer your two questions. Ceru is no longer among the living. He gave his life, as he promised his father back on Hyneria, in the service of those less fortunate. As for Zoe, she is with child and that child, if born, will be Von's grandson/daughter. Haven't seen the ultrasound yet. Maybe I should ask Kyra, since I think she knows from the dataport. :-D

As for Ceru, I think we will learn quite a bit about him and the last two years from Zoe. This story is nothing if not returning to the past to fill in blanks and deepen characters. Expect to see more of Ceru, through the eyes of Zoe. :-)

Trée said...

Garg, some love the story and others find it's just not their cup of tea. In life, I would expect no less. Thanks for stopping by. :-)

Trée said...

Thanks Kate. I usually do interviews as a stand alone piece. As I started this chapter, I was aching to get inside of Kyra's head, to hear what she was thinking and I was wishing I was writing in the first person from her point of view. Since I wasn't, and since I have no rules for the literary composition of this story, I snatched the first person from an old interview and just slapped it right the middle. :-D

Trée said...

Brandy, thanks for stopping by and lighting a candle with your smile. ;-)

Trée said...

Sweetest, the moment is so achingly private, for Von, I almost didn't write about it for two reasons. First, some things should remain private, which, in part, explains why we don't hear from Von in this short piece. Second, I always feel on thin ice trying to describe that which is beyond words and, to use a theme from this chapter, feel as if to attempt to describe what cannot be described is sacrilege. Haven't said all that, I did it anyway. :-D

As always, your comments are the coffee in my cup. :-)

kenni said...

wow! i can only try to write this good...

Agnes said...

Trée, I've been away from the story so long that I'm completely lost...but you know I only read for the pictures anyway. LOL
I can't believe the beautiful fractals you're still making. In-f*%ing-credible - as always. :)
I hope all is well in your world.
Much love and great big boot-wearing hugs.
Aggie

Trée said...

Thanks Kenni. One sentence at a time. Sometimes that's about all I can manage. :-)

Trée said...

Aggie, always a great pleasure to see you and your boots hanging around. Love and hugs my sexy blogger babe. :-)

Cha Cha said...

1. It works. It especially helps folks like me, who are more recent readers.

2. 'Placing his hands on the cold clear glass'....I felt that glass when reading that. Was a way cool feeling.

3. My turn to say 'thank you for the kind words' to YOU, for the nice things you said about me in your comment area yesterday. :-D

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xo, Mr. Tree

Trée said...

Strump, you always know just what to say. :-)

:-D
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chimerastone said...

I read some of the post of your blog and not sure what is about. Are all these your writing? It's highly creative and love the images. It feels what travelling through space would be like.

Trée said...

Chimerastone, the prose and the images are all mine. Thanks for taking a moment to leave a kind word, always appreciated. :-)

If you look on my sidebar under Story Stuff, you will see a link for Who's Who in the story--this post will give you a synopsis of both the story and the main characters. In short, it is a story about relationships and love. Space is just a backdrop. :-)

Trée said...

Happy New Year Y! I thought you had exited blogland. What a pleasant surprise to see your gorgeous avatar again. Hugs and kisses my dear woman in black or red or black with red. :-D

Miladysa said...

Thank you Trée :)

PestProJoe said...

Nice images. Very creative and colorful. Congrats on the the Blog of note.

Do-It-Yourself Pest Control

Trée said...

Miladysa, you're welcome. :-)

Thanks Joe. Much appreciated. :-)

Trée said...

Y, I'd have it no other frailing way. ;-)

J. P. Smith said...

i love the concept of your story but your writing is a bit overwhelming to me.

Trée said...

JP, my writing is overwrought baroque prose pretending to have a poetic bent. Like dark beer, not to everyone's liking or taste. Your view is fair and, if I weren't writing this stuff myself, might very well feel the same. Thanks for taking the time to leave an honest comment--always appreciated.

Russell said...

These pictures you make are incredible

Trée said...

Thanks for the kind words Russell. Much appreciated.

Cha Cha said...

So.

I've got a coupla pints o' Guinness, a pair of pink rubber gloves, and some baby oil...

:-D

Trée said...

I would spell that H-E-A-V-E-N. I'm knocking. Can you hear me? :-D

Huck said...

Dude this is by far the best pic and it is insanely dank. Im a graphic designer myself and would love to know how you made this. Really good

Trée said...

OSB, most of these images were created with a fractal flame program call Apophysis, which is freeware. Google the name and you will find it. Takes a little bit of time to learn how to manipulate "the math" but can be a very addicting program. You've been warned. :-D

Thanks for the kind words. Always appreciated.

Cha Cha said...

Heaven is when I'm not online for a few days and I come here and get all excited about all the catching up I have to do....

I'm very much smiling right now.

:-D

Trée said...

Heaven is reading all your bone inducing comments my dear Strumpet. :-D

Cha Cha said...

You serve up the BEST compliments, dearest Mr. Tree!

Trée said...

Strumper, I do try. By the way, the Foo Fighters kicked arse! Holy Shiott were they good. :-D

Trée said...

C'est, thank you. Hope to see you around again. :-)