Behavior speaks
Words don’t
Past unfolds
Truth won’t
Assumptions made
Apologies not
Righteous rain
Falling hot
Agendas blind
Heated heads
Midnight labor
Fixed beds
Eyes stare
Seeing deuce
Mind moving
Running loose
Fingers numb
Pen dry
Report due
Noon high
Views recorded
Opinions weighed
Stories told
Loudly neighed
Anticipation dew
Upon brow
Action considered
Confounds how
Hands tied
Bloody hue
Judgment demands
Quarter due
Relationships matter
Scores deceive
This most
I believe
20 comments:
Great poem. The short lines have an urgency and intensity that underscore the basic theme. Just one question - where's the image?? If you need / want to borrow one of mine just ask. For you, I'll even get rid of the clipart :)
I wish I could write a poem like that.
Actions always speak louder than words.
Firing God
God, you're keeping score?
I fired you for that
Back in the last days of Earth.
Don't come around here
With your tally marks.
I'll have to thump your noggin.
Imagine talking
To you like I do.
It's what comes from old friendship.
Behavior speaks
Words don’t?
There are no truer words... ever
wow, your poem took be back to my former place of employment. Nicely done.
BTW - Don't know if you've been here, but Thunder Canyon Brewery is a great place to eat. NW side of Tucson.
Keeping bearings and knowing what really matters seems the only way through without injury and remembering when viewpoints are so notably off keel eventually they topple and lessons are learned. Good for them, good for the world. Exceptionally well-written piece, pressure building like before a storm breaks. Cold, wind, rain, but there is shelter under the cover of those last lines.
Oooooh, very cool, you Merlin with words !
I love the abcb rhyming & the two words lines!
Also the juxtaposition of the contrasts is amazing!
Great Poem Tree!
Another fine poem that made my heart beat a little faster. The last words gave me goosebumps.
Hugs to you!
Kimmie
and that was only Monday...I look forward to more.
Becky, I could have written a book by Friday, I'm just not sure it's one I'd want to read. Thanks for all you do. Your attitude is always refreshing. Hope and trust you have arrived home safe and sound. :-)
Thanks Kimmie. Your kind words are always appreciated. :-)
Mona, you make me smile. The intensity of the feeling, this poem, almost demanded the breathless two word lines, the brutal abruptness, like a boxer, punching you in the face, not letting you catch your breath, relentless. Glad you like this one. :-)
Thanks Annie. I'll take some more hugs if you got'em. :-D
Thank you Ms Storm. I feel like I've been snake-bit and I need someone to suck the venom from, well, take your pick. :-D
Care to do a little . . . ;-)
Deb, thanks for the kind words. Tucson was very kind to me this week. I love, love, love the pastel blue skies and the mountain backdrops. I wish I had had time to explore something other than the inside of my resort, but at last, such is the nature of a National meeting.
Nice work Christopher. :-)
Meleah, I almost wish I hadn't had the experience to write a poem like this. Think of it as pain pouring forth, of emotion and anguish finding pen and paper. Thank you, as always, for your very kind words. :-)
Jenni, thanks for the offer on an image. One day I may just take you up on that. Your images are masterpieces and I would be proud to display them on my site. I decided not to put an image with this post simply to set it apart from The Story postings and to not detract from the words in their raw black and white state. Your kind words on the poem are very, very much appreciated. Thank you. :-)
Behavior speaks
Words don't
Awesome right off the bat!
I have scrolled through and read a bunch tonight. Not caught up, but filled in a bit. So glad that the lovers are in each other's arms again. Power in poetry!
I hope that 2009 is being kind to you Tree.
Jen-nay, so nice to see you stopping by again. You've been missed. As always, thanks for the kind words. :-)
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