ed note: New chapter type introduced: Aborted. An aborted chapter was written but not posted, not for reasons of content like an Outtake Chapter, but for reasons of style and/or writing. For example, the chapter below did take place, but the writing is lackluster at best and its content really adds very little to the story. An aborted chapter is one that could be posted, and did happen, but would need to be rewritten but since the action is so insignificant stands little chance of getting that time. So, without further ado, I present the first, of hopefully not too many, Aborted Chapters.
"Who's with him in the pod," asked Trev.
"Ariel," said Von.
"What are they doing?"
"Don't know. He has all communication shut off. Nothing getting in. Nothing getting out."
"Is something wrong with the pod?"
"Nope. Seems they are just sitting there. All systems are green, so your guess is as good as mine."
"So, do we just sit here?"
"For now."
"What if--"
"What if he needed some space. What if he needed some time. Do you want to rob him of the very thing he is seeking?"
"I'm just saying."
"If he wanted to do harm, he has had plenty of time. And if he does intend harm, he will have plenty of time before we could get there."
"What if they are in trouble? Need our help?"
Von turned to Trev. His look didn't require words.
"Okay, we sit. I got it."
2 comments:
I've enjoyed all the Outtake chapters and likewise I enjoyed this. Was nice to see Trev in another situation where he seems to have risen somewhat in ranks, matured enough to become included, taken seriously, respected and that is with the look that he receives here, but then he is with Von. :-)
"What if he needed some space. What if he needed some time. Do you want to rob him of the very thing he is seeking?" There has been so little sharing around the death of Cait, just as when what happened to Trev happened to Trev, personal battles, though these characters have been through thick and thin together some paths can only be travelled alone and those who have had such a path know this..one wonders as they, why they sit there, what is going through John's mind, what is going through Ariel's, what is being said, and what remains unsaid.
Enjoyed this. :-) Happy Sunday, sweet stuff, x
The chapter this alludes to, which I never wrote although I wanted to and thought a lot about and maybe one day will, is the rest of the conversation between John and Ariel in the Pod. He took her there to have time alone with her, to create a different environment, to communicate to her that she is still valued and important to him, which is why he turned off all communication.
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