Sunday, October 25, 2009

687. to the mountains

He took her to the mountains, in autumn, to a cave of a cottage amidst the ducats of fall. Where before was stone, now only wood, old timber, worn in time of hand and foot, warm in history, of stories before fire and food. Everywhere, quilts, stitched by hand, of natural fiber, soft as fledged feather or early untrod snow, falling, tip-toeing from quiet skies. She would wake to flue and fire and breakfast on a tray delivered in flannel with a smile. All before the mist was gone while still the chill of night kept toes under cover. Years later, she often said, those sounds, of his feet on the hardwood floor, the opening of the flue, the crackling of fire, of pans and pots in the kitchen, of the heavy door opening on iron hinges; these sounds she would say, were the verse before the verse. Each sound, as if alive, in tune, communicating an action, creating a space as if hands reaching forth and pulling back the curtains of time where even clocks seemed to tick slower, bowing to breath to mark the moments, to acknowledge and cede the stage to life, to love, to the wonder of two people revolving around the axis of mystery.

And when breakfast was taken and trays set aside, when sunlight shown through laden firs, through windows pane-ing crosses upon their bed, when bejeweled snow sparkled of day waking, then, knees bent to table, he would take pen to parchment, her head on his shoulder, eyes closed, listening to the ink, the nib, that warmness of creation and she would begin to breathe as she did at night when her hands hung his arms like vines round boughs and his eyes were as moons on fire and his hair askance in homage to desire. The sound of his pen, of paper absorbing the essence of his mind, of loops and dashes and periods and of spaces too, as if inhaling before again plunging into verb and standing upon nouns; and in this way he made love to her before he made love to her and by Janus she struggled to explain how one was different from the other.

After some time, as billowed sail she heard paper snap, vellum taut in hand, and the familiar clack of pen put to rest on the night table. As if to brace for the breath to come, of the reading, his soul breathing, her arms tighten around his torso, hair flowing over his shoulder, down his back and over his cold erect nipple. Then words came, slowly at first. Keeping her ear to his chest, she listened to verse and to heart, to the expanding of his lungs, to the rise and fall of each line, each rhyme, to the melody that surpassed language, in the way of food, of water, of the touch of a hand on fevered head or lips on love long lost returned, recovered, embraced and multiplied. Words became something other, perhaps a pulse, a sigh, some hidden communication from some hidden place beautiful, some oasis within his cartography undiscovered. Taking his left hand, she laced her fingers into his and squeezed warmth between them as the gentle humid waves of her breath rolled across his chest, as the dancing of the day to come, in her mind.

4 comments:

Nevine Sultan said...

Reads like poetry, feels like poetry. It oozes into the senses and then dissolves. Perfectly quiet.

Nevine

Trée said...

Thanks Nevine. Kindness is always welcomed.

Autumn said...

Without numbers, still one would know with whom we were, just as one cannot stop the rain from falling, so too one cannot stop that instant recognition, the way we recognize footsteps coming down the stairs or the gait of someone at distance. I've tried at times to search the words, hold them up against other examples in an attempt to discover just how this is done, how it is that in those first moments, one can tell with near certainty who namelessly features within. The creation of atmosphere is a skill that you have mastered, and not just mastered, for you have the extraordinary ability for centering your writing within the very first words. Essence is a word, I've often used in comments, in regards to the creation of characters most often, but the entire story has worked this way, which is why so many times, you've heard myself and others make statements along the lines of you having been born a writer, that these words, this ability, was within you long before you ever wrote those first fictional postings. This word seems too to respond to any posing of how, the essence (the heart) so natural and clear, that it would be recognizable within the very first words of a new chapter, as though pen itself had been dipped and it were colour and aroma in disclosure. How I do love the gloriously rich and vibrant language that you make such effective and innovative use of. It swirls and surrounds, captures and enraptures twofold, for the language itself and the scene you set, sensations flittering, darting, between mind and soul, so potent and consuming for those moments within and the moments thereafter, to be cliche, it is as though one has died and gone to heaven, for heavenly is about the only way I know how to desribe the intense delight that overwhelm the senses. You seem, in these scenes, to capture and voice, the core of every dream that the heart yearns for, consciously or subconsciously. The quietness, the unspoken, in the askance and the dashes, the inhalation and the beats of heart, of step, of clock, of life. This beautiful piece of writing is already one of my favourites and I have yet to truly immerse myself within more than that virgin time. Indescribably marvellous!

Trée said...

My dearest Sunshine, having you back and commenting is as if I've been reborn, such the life your words breathe into me. I've revised the third stanza quite a bit, tightening up some weak verbs and sanding a few rough syntactic edges. As I think you know and as you have probably already done, this chapter is better when read aloud than just read. I was hoping to capture a moment never witnessed outside of the parties involved, a moment experienced in sound and sight and smell stirred by hope and dreams and anticipation, not just of the hour or the day, but of the life such a morning conjures, perhaps even cajoles from the heart. That this chapter pleases you pleases me and although I don't smile often, I'm smiling now. Thank you.