Sunday, October 04, 2009

sunday morning scribbles II

there is

the gray light of dawn
of morning seagulls
of sheets still fresh
with yesterday's warmth

my hand floats
on your rising torso
as we did the day before
in laughter, in the sea

my lips riding the crest
of your shoulder
of humid trails
I trace, softly

and I feel the first stirrings
of your sleepy toes
the tightness of morning
thighs taut

of dream tussled tresses
upon my brow
and closed-eyed
whispers of a Sunday morning

and yesterday's sand
upon the floor
of towels thrown
of clothes abandoned

as you bend your knee
and I bend mine

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I want to be a flower
not for beauty
or fragrance

but to live but briefly
impaled in the drill of bees
a whore complete of petal exposed

all dewy in the morn
spread and split and nooned
just a slut for the buzz

for the breeze
for those that come and go
taking what they want

what they need
however briefly
to live complete

42 comments:

  1. I often revise after I post as I have done here. For the sake of those who have read the first, and I find often prefer the first, the line:

    of clothes abandoned

    was originally

    of candles serviced

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  2. ..however briefly, to live complete...Beautiful work.

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  3. This is definitely one of my favourites. I love the strength of the second half, The force...
    Beautiful.

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  4. I've been looking over your site and I'm intrigued by your writing style - very natural and unaffected. I will be back...

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  5. Thanks Nevine. Hope to see you again.

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  6. Loved the first section. Not sure about making a flower akin to a whore. The word whore sounds sullied yet flowers are natural beauties, gifts of nature... But I suppose if you are talking about mass produced cut flowers laced with bee killing pesticides and artificial colour, then you may well be right. Either way, I love your poetry.

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  7. Thanks Jasmine. The word whore was meant to apply to me, not the flower, metaphorically speaking. So no worries, your flowers remain unsullied. ;-)

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  8. Trée, I'm flattered you thought the picture was me ;) lol I wouldn't mind having my lip pierced either! But alas she is prettier than me, and probably younger too!

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  9. Oh my, maybe I'm the one who needs glasses. ROFL!

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  10. Let's keep it that way! Better that than you confusing me for some old ugly lady!

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  11. Well, that model just doesn't have the 'parted lip' pose you've perfected. I was gonna ask about the piercing. Wasn't sure how I missed that. You know my attention to detail. ;-)

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  12. I do! That's why I was surprised with your mistake ;) She doesn't have the 'parted lip' pose, but she does have a nice pucker ;)

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  13. I think I was distracted by the glasses. :-D

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  14. Or was it the cleavage? lol
    G'night ;)

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  15. Could have been the combination. ;-)

    Nite Cande.

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  16. I love this piece, Trée. I have several favorite bits but this is number 1...

    "as you bend your knee
    and I bend mine"

    well done.

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  17. DH, so nice to see you again. You found my favorite stanza, those two lines holding the entire poem, so natural, the bend of one knee followed by the bend of the other, that soft, wonderful communication of the legs in the early morning light. Thanks for the kind words. :-)

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  18. the scribble that didn't make it:

    want to gain weight
    because I can

    because I know
    you will love me

    still
    because I know

    your champagne
    eyes

    will see me
    all the same

    my
    amber ale

    head
    or tail

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  19. i want to be a flower.....

    the rest is awesome and divine.

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  20. The scribble that didn't make it is delectable. The repartee'd commentary is smilable. The fleur-de-lit poetic is out of this world wonderful. Awakening my dormant worlds.

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  21. Silver, you are very kind. Thank you.

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  22. Constance, your fingers are in my heart. Be gentle. I know you will. Just feel the need to say it.

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  23. Constance, this scribble is for you:

    my father was a yeller
    so I never knew who to be
    to not be the yellee

    I've spent the rest of my life
    trying to find that little boy
    who so long ago

    and for so long a time
    hid behind a door
    or a yard

    or anywhere
    where
    he wasn't

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  24. The first part, ummm, dreamy slow and of painful want from me. And it transitions right there in the simultaneous bend and becomes something else entirely. I think whore works fantastically here, actually. It's all lurid drill and buzz, slutty part of petals and all. A smack of a justaposition in positions between the first and the second. Both got my attention, Tree. What a way to wake up on a Sunday! (And here I am just off to couch again.)

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  25. Trée, to you

    thank you for tellin
    bout the yellin
    we twins, half-sibs
    same dads for sure
    That little boy
    is peeping through
    everything you say and do
    oh yeah, we scared
    but what the hey
    no can resist
    "come out and play!"

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  26. And sometimes I just want to go and cry my heart out.

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  27. I'll bring buckets. One for you and one for me. We'll cry our hearts out together.

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  28. I thought I would stop by and I am glad I did. Your words make me close my eyes and see with my heart.
    Katelen

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  29. Katelen, I'm very happy to see you visiting again. Thanks for the kind words.

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  30. incredible imagery in the flower-whore poem, i hadn't thought of this association -

    for the breeze
    for those that come and go
    taking what they want

    what they need
    however briefly
    to live complete

    i so love this idea of the completely surrendered, opened flower, each moment made more precious by the awareness of its ephemerity ...

    (but then we will need a flower with Tree consciousness :-)

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  31. ps. i totally agree with D.H.

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  32. Roxanna, if you like this idea, you might really like a poem I wrote a few months ago:


    Banshees


    This morning
    I walked out my front door
    to fields and meadows
    blooming hues
    of buzzing golds
    and brilliant blacks
    floating
    sex
    machines
    banshees
    riding
    roughshod
    you could almost
    hear
    the roses
    shriek
    and
    the tulips
    look
    the
    other
    way

    Damn
    I
    was
    jealous

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  33. Second poem, a few backstory thoughts:

    (1) to open fully
    (2) to give completely
    (3) to live but once
    (4) briefly
    (5) to know the moment
    (6) to die to the moment
    (7) so as not to suffer
    (8) all the other moments
    (9) before the next moment
    (10) but to die naked
    (11) exposed as the open flower
    (12) drowning in lust
    (13) consumed in symbiosis
    (14) a return of the rivulet
    (15) to the river
    (16) and flow to the sea

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  34. Tree, I love the banshee poem. Wild and lush and bucking the morning. But here, there is something, and I say this with one hand firmly knocking wood three times even though I know it won't save me, but there is something in death that gives the one moment significance. Beauty is derived from its passing. Damn beauty is only beautiful when it's fleeting. Frick! (I wrote something about this once on my front door called bookends, I think. How we gain value by the passing of all.)
    xo
    erin

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  35. I indeed like the Banshees very much - the ending is amazing, so intense despite (or thanks to) its simplicity - and the sudden change of rhythm.
    the second poem echoes so much of my own obsessions... i receive your gift in silence -

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  36. Roxana, thank you. Silence is golden, to me.

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  37. Kiss me Erin. I need your lips, not your words.

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  38. I dreamt last night that I was floating in an ocean. Way out far from shore. I was with another woman, a friend of mine, who was talking about you. "Yeah, but have you read his writing?" I asked. "No." So I took her inside (suddenly transported from sea to shore,) and found your blog. I was looking for something in particular, your best piece of writing to show her. But there was so much, "here, read this, oh, and read this." And then I awoke.

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  39. My dear Temptress, I have dreamed too with another, of you and the images are vivid and too there is a warm floating and soft flesh and consuming eyes.

    Thank you for the comment. It was and is a wonderful surprise on this grey day--a dash of color so to speak.

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